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The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges up on one's privacy. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Social
media
 is a breakthrough for all of humanity which makes it favourable among younglings, so they always try to promote
this
 to connect with
people
 from around the globe,
although
 there are some higher-ups that say sites like
this
 can interfere with
one
's own matters.
This
 essay will discuss both views on whether social
media
 is a friend or a foe . There are two main factors why
people
 support social
media
.
First
 is communication, while a family member, friend or loved
one
 is far away from you, the ability to communicate will remain so that person could keep in touch.
Moreover
one
 can learn about many communities' cultures. For ,example Many
people
 nowadays have a lot of knowledge about many places even if they have never been to these locations before. And that's what makes it interesting about social
media
 the ability to communicate with friends and to learn the folklore of other societies.
However
 there is a downside which is the lack of privacy,
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person can have. Influencers invented
this
 trend that posting every little detail about your life is an open thing to do, which can lead
people
 to be victims of a lot of bad actions on many platforms
for instance
 cyberbullying
therefore
 privacy can never be seen in social
media
. To conclude, in my ,opinion social
media
 is still
one
 of the best human inventions and I support it even if there are some questionable acts in it, if we cooperate together we can solve these problems and make social
media
 a better place .
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