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people should use renewable energy instead of nonrenewable energy. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #energy #nonrenewable
The pie charts provide a comparison of the percentages of 5 different types of
energy
 produced in a
country
 between the years 1995 and 2005. Overall, gas, coal,
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and petro
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petro
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petrol
 were the three main sources that were produced in the
country
 over the period shown.
Additionally
, the amount of
petro
 produced in the
country
 decreased noticeably. At the beginning of the period, the percentage of coal produced in the
country
 was highest, at 29,80%, followed by gas, at 29,63%. The proportion of
petro
 produced in the nation was lower, at 29,27%. The figure for nuclear
energy
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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, at 6,40%. The percentage of other sources of
energy
 was less than 5%. From the period 1995 to 2005, there was a steadily increasing tendency in the percentages of coal and gas, to 30,93% and to 30,31% respectively while the percentage of
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petrol
petro
 produced in the
country
 dropped rapidly to 19.55%. The rate of nuclear
energy
 experienced a modest increase, to 10.10%. A substantial rise of 5% in the percentages of other types of
energy
 produced in the
country
.
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