Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Many
museums
require fees for entry, Use synonyms
while
others are free. I believe the advantages of charging Linking Words
people
for admission to Use synonyms
museums
outweigh the disadvantages. Because without an entry Use synonyms
Use synonyms
fee
they would not earn profit for the maintenance of Add a comma
fee,
museums
. On the one hand, admission fees allow the Use synonyms
museums
to protect the collections of Use synonyms
museums
. By collecting the revenue, it can be used for the preservation of the museum. Use synonyms
This
income can Linking Words
also
be used for the renovation of the Linking Words
museums
. Mainly these Use synonyms
museums
are funded by government sectors,Use synonyms
Correct pronoun usage
which
this
can lead to Linking Words
the
shortage of money. So, Correct article usage
a
by
charging admission fees could be beneficial for the payment of Change preposition
apply
salary
of employees Correct article usage
the salary
those
who are working there. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For instance
, Linking Words
while
comparing many Linking Words
museums
, Use synonyms
who
collect entry Correct pronoun usage
those that
Use synonyms
fee
are far more maintained and cleaner than those Fix the agreement mistake
fees
who
do not chargeCorrect pronoun usage
that
for
Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
fee
. Fix the agreement mistake
fees
On the other hand
, allowing entrance Linking Words
Use synonyms
fee
will demotivate Fix the agreement mistake
fees
people
who are from low-incomeUse synonyms
background
. Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
Linking Words
Subsequently
they cannot be able to access free knowledge and information about cultural heritage. Add a comma
Subsequently,
However
, most of the Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
are
not there to treasure the exhibits but came to experience the free services. Wrong verb form
were
Furthermore
, crowded Linking Words
people
can be noisier and might Use synonyms
also
damage some exhibits. In conclusion, Linking Words
preservation
of exhibits is prioritized more as it could have valuable things from the past, Correct article usage
the preservation
for
Correct word choice
and for
this
they need profit. Linking Words
This
will improve the economy and can maintain the museum in a good way.Linking Words
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