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we live in the world in which we are constantly xposed to advertising. To what extend does advertising influence our choices as constumers and what effect does it have on our lifes? Discuss the issue and give your opinion

#world #influence #choices #constumers #effect #lifes
More and more people live in the rush and don’t have time to consider their
consumers
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 choices. Ubiquitous
adds
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ads
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 have
influence
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to
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 our subconscious and significantly affect our
shoppings
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This
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influence
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 our consumer choices and will prove that they have an enormous effect. Adds are getting more and more popular. In
this
 day and age, we can easily find them not only
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Internet
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,
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 but
also
 at
the
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bus stops,
huge
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 billboards or even on
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buildings. People work harder than
even
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 before and time is the most valuable currency. Many of us, even if we are tired of the ubiquitous advertisements or we consider them as silly or boring, will choose the product from the advertisement
instead
 of
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 product which is not known. It is because our brain prefers things that it knows and associates, they seem to be a safer choice
then
. What is more, modern technology is able to show us
adds
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ads
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 which are related to our interests. Adds which are shown on our social media or on other websites are not random. Algorithms manipulate us and show us things which are connected to our previous findings
in
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 the Internet. In
this
 way, producents are able to increase their
sells
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 and reach the target audience. To conclude,I believe that advertisements have
incredible
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 influence
to
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 our consumer choices. Despite there
are
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 lots of better products than these from the
adds
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ads
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, we like to choose something we know. Adds causes that we are too lazy to check
enything
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anything
 else, ask somebody for advice or even
to
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read the list of ingredients of
product
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the product
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