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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. What makes them work harder? Is it a good thing or a bad thing? Give reasons and examples from your personal experiences.

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Today’s fast-changing world has imposed great pressure on the whole society, requiring a comprehensive skill set totally from the workforce. Confronted with these requests, it’s plausible for senses of vocation and competition to be summoned up. Necessary as
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 may seem, there are still chances that dynamism of
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 kind could still be counterproductive. Among various reasons urging diligence, perhaps the desire for better lives is the commonest.
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 study or
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 hard to fulfil their family commitments, trying to give all the best to their beloved ones. Competition is another reason pushing
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 to endeavour.
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, those newly employed
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 extra shifts to prove their competence while those who are experienced strive for fear of being replaced by either these newcomers or automation.
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, there are
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 innately industrious
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 for whom performance at
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 is more of self-fulfilment than merely proof of their capability.
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, hardworking doesn’t always generate good results.
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, excessive responsibilities could bring physical or mental fatigue, jeopardizing
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’s health and decreasing employees’ long-term strength and performance.
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, the long-lasting imbalance between
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 and life may incur or intensify tensions between family members, because rather than material possessions, what
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 want is usually being accompanied by their close relatives.
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, the habit of hardworking could
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 reinforce the illusion that diligence is destined to be rewarded, and
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 mindset could bring enormous depression once anything unexpected happens, destroying
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’s hope and motivation thoroughly. In conclusion, some
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work
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 harder than others in the pursuit of self-fulfilment or better lives, while others have no alternative but to compete with others.
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, it is generally not a good thing because of the potential harm.

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