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Every country in the world has its road rules, but many drivers don’t obey them. Why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Many
drivers
 disobey the
traffic
rules
 which are legislated by the government. The main cause of
this
 problem as well as a few solutions will be discussed in
this
 essay. Since there is no public awareness of
traffic
rules
 and their advantages and disadvantages,
drivers
 tend to disrespect them. Most
drivers
 nowadays are hurried up where ever they go, join a meeting or an appointment, and prefer to disobey the road
rules
 to save more time.
Additionally
, there are no heavy fines for
drivers
 who do not follow the
rules
. The restricted speed signboards have shown but people enjoy to over the limited speed,
this
 is at the root of accident causes but there is not any hard punishment for them. There are a number of steps that need to be taken to solve
this
 problem.
First
 of all, people should be fully aware of
traffic
rules
 and
its
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 advantages. Driving schools, television programs and virtual platforms can play an important role in
this
 case and governments should invest in these tools to educate people.
Moreover
, there should be a law according to which
drivers
 with a high number of non-observances of road
rules
 should be banned from driving for a while and pay heavy fines. To conclude, everyone should respect
to
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the
traffic
rules
 to mitigate the number of accidents. Both the government and individuals are responsible for
this
.
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