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Some people think governments should make university education free, but others think students should pay fees by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether
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 tuition should be free or not has been a discussion topic for a long time.
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 some may support the former opinion, my view is that
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 education should be fully funded by the government.
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, in case if
students
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 pay the
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 fee by themselves, it can easily reach around 500 million yen in total, which is a huge commitment so people tend to think about their future seriously before applying to
universities
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. The
University
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 of Tokyo reported that those
students
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 who paid the full cost by themselves have less chance of changing the faculty in the middle of the course because they research well before applying to
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.
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, the nation can allocate the budget for other important factors
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 as the nation's cybersecurity and decarbonization. Meanwhile, in case the government own the tuition fee, it can produce equal opportunities to apply for
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 and faculties regardless of their financial status.
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 is a great solution because there are many potentially skilled people without enough money.
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, we can expect that it has a great impact on society.
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, in North Europe, the education cost for
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students
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 is generally free, and many talented people from the low-income stage are now studying at
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 and impacting the economy.
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, it brings economic growth which leads to GDP improvement. In conclusion, owning the tuition by admission is effective for
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 right decision-making
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 the field of study for
students
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, and in
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 the government fund it, it opens the door to low-income
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 and improves their economy. In my view, I agree with the latter view.

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