Many parts of world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals ar ceban water. Choose one resourse that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Many
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of
world
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the world
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are
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losing significant natural
assests
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assets
,
such
as forests, creatures, or clean
woter
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water
. Choose one resource
that is
vanishing and explain why it needs to be rescued. In my opinion, many resources are missing nowadays,
for
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water
forests, and some animals. They
mus't
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must
be preserved. In
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the contemprary
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contemprary
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contemporary
era
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there are so many natural gifts for living better clean
water
. It is a common
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knowledge
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that most part of the earth is
covering
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by
water
. While
human
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a human
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has faced
by
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scarcity
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the scarcity
a scarcity
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of drinking
water
.
This
essay will argue the grounds why it is important to pay attention to lack of the
water
.
Water
is a vital liquid all around the world. Because not only all animals and plants are alive by eater but
aslo
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also
most
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of our bodies consist of
water
.
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that 97
percent
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of
earth
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water
is salty so there
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3percent
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3 percent
sweet
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drink
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left over. In most countries
espacially
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especially
under
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in
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developing and developing countries
water
concumption
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consumption
in
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is
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a
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wrong way and most of the clean
water
are
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is
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wasted. Due to the population
explosion
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it would be no drop
of
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in
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clean
water
for
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in
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future
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. That means, there will be
on
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no
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water
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the water
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to drink and crop cultivation .
Hence
,
whitout
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without
agricultural
productions
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production
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it might no animal
husbandy
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husbandry
husband
consequently
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and consequently
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no meat or
diary
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dairy
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no
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and no
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vegetables for
people
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people's
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need
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. It is unbelievable being alive
whitout
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without
any food
and
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or
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water
. In conclusion, in view of
arguments
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outlined above, it can conclude that people must be informed about
importance
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the importance
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of
water
role in
their
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apply
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all aspects of
lives
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life
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.
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