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After graduating from high school, some young people decide to start working right away instead of going to the university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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It is claimed that some
youngesters
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youngsters
 land a
job
 after graduating high school rather than taking admission to
the
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 college or university. In the following
paragraphs
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 merits and demerits of
this
 phenomenon will be assessed
To begin
 with , commencing to work from their earlier ages , adults can get many benefits.
Firstly
 , they are able to supply their needs by earning their living wages . They
are not only enable
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 to
satisfying
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 their needs , but they
also
 can support their parents financially along with
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sense of independence .
Secondly
, they could gain
job
 experiences and practices
in particular
 fields having nurtured their certain
skills
 .
For example
 , working as a shop assistant , adolescents interact with different people and count
total
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 prices of purchases and they might enhance their communication
skills
 alongside
with
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numerical
skills
.
Although
,
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 practical
knowledge
 can be gained quickly, theoretical
knowledge
 is an integral part of work and life which might lead to good
job
 prospects in the foreseeable future. By going to
the
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higher education, most
youngesters
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youngsters
first
 assimilate theoretical
knowledge
 , which
incorporated
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 into a subject syllabus , by guided learning which creates substantial fundament to their practical
skills
.
On
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the
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other words, they might be more able to accomplish their task for the
first
 without trial and error.
Furthermore
, it is common
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know
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 that people who have
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
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degrees
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have more
job
 prospects than somebody who graduated
secondary
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from secondary
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 school . In many
organization
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organizations
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 and
companies
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,companies
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 employees want to hire
well qualified
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 workers . Because many of them consider these workers
as
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a experts
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an expert
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of
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 their area . It is evident that they studied hard and many years to get their degrees. To recapitulate, while working
in
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 earlier ages may lead to good living conditions with
plethora
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a plethora
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 of experience and practice , there might be
lack
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a lack
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 of
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theoretical
therotical
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theoretical
knowledge
 and less potential
to
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 promotion
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