Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money?
These days, people usually spend their cash to buy everything they like.
However
, if they understood the value of money
, admittedly, they would not waste it.
To elaborate, nowadays, since our society is very materialistic , many people no matter whether they are young or adult
, certainly, do not use with parsimony their funds. Indeed, since they frequently wear any item of clothing related to the current fashion they enjoy following , they could purchase all the dresses , jackets or any couple of shoes they find in the shops they usually go to even though they need to use a large amount of their cash to get them. Fix the agreement mistake
adults
Besides
this
, in case they do not have enough money
to buy expensive things they would like to own, such
as a wonderful car or house, they might ask for a loan to
their relatives or friends to achieve their purpose.
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However
, if people well knew the difference between the necessary and superfluous things they can have , if they thought about those who do not have enough money
for their living as they live in poverty or war conditions, certainly, they would try to to
use their funds with moderation . Remove the redundancy
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For instance
, by the time my grandmother started to live alone, she had the habit of counting how many coins she daily used when she came back her
home in the evening. Correct pronoun usage
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Consequently
,the whole funds her husband left to her at his death was
enough for all her life.
In conclusion, I personally think that if any person started to Correct subject-verb agreement
were
reflected
on the fact that she or Change the verb
reflect
he
has Correct pronoun usage
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the
great Correct article usage
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lucky
earning the Replace the word
luck
money
he or she owns, he or she might try not to waste it anymore.Submitted by silviamangioni on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite