Many Cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments. Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent years, it has been noticed that
large
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number of cities are making
an efforts
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to turn the play area and farming land into a new residential society which itself has
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impact on
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the humanlife
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humanlife
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human life
ecosystem.
Moreover
,
this
essay will discuss why it’s
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major concern in many areas as well as their impact on daily life. On the one hand, many people find it hard to locate any public places in most
of
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the
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cities where they can gather and
playaround
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play around
playground
. Usually, children after school will be willing to go to
nearby
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park
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to
playaround
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play around
with
the
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friends
and
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also
it has been seen that even senior citizens walk into
park
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to find
to
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some relaxation and have a conversation with their
friends
. There has been a debate on
this
issue
from
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very
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long time. Definitely, to balance the modern lifestyle where
majority
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pupils
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finding
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it difficult to maintain relations with
friends
and family. Somehow, there are parks which is keeping children
being
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socially active and people
from
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any age
to
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have some relaxation place to
hangout
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and make new
friends
as well.
On the other hand
, despite knowing the fact that turning
a
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farmland into
development
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society will badly shape the
food
chain supply into disaster. In modern days, it has become really tough to buy organic
food
which
are
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grown with natural resources. Most cities
depends
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on
food
from the countryside and authorities never really worked
on
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to protect
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the little piece of farming land for cultivation. In case of any calamity disaster happens, solely depending on
contryside
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countryside
food
will break the chain of transportation
indirectly
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it will create havoc for
food
availiability
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availability
. To conclude, turning farmland into new development
socities
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societies
will extensively create many negative impacts on many
individuals
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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which makes them less social and brings them more stress. As well as create havoc kind of situation in logistic distribution during any natural disaster occurs.
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