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Band 7.5

You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house.

#house #friend #news #neighbourhood
Hello Pedro, I am writing to you to inform you that I've
finally
 moved into a new house. Maybe you remember as we together watched all the offers and
this
 variant was the best. So,
to begin
 with, a lot has changed since the
last
 time I saw a house.
Firstly
, Mrs Clark (who is the owner of the accommodation) made different changes.
For instance
, she put up a barbeque machine, bought a lawn mower, and completely changed the kitchen. I like it so much and as there is so much space, I'm thinking about putting on a pool.
Secondly
, the neighbourhood is fairly impeccable.
This
 place is so quiet as there are not many cars going on the road throughout the day. My neighbours are so friendly and kind. They invited me to their house to celebrate my move. I like going for a walk here because people like to plant unique types of trees and flowers. And the sight from my balcony on the second floor is picturesque.
To sum up
, I'm happy with my new place and I would like to invite you to come and celebrate.I can pick you up tomorrow at 7pm, just let me know. I look forward to your reply See you
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Vocabulary and Sentence Structure
Consider varying sentence structure and using a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your writing.
Grammar and Accuracy
Remember to proofread your letter to correct small inaccuracies, like ensuring the subject-verb agreement and proper use of articles.
Structure and Clarity
You have effectively structured your letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which aids in overall readability and flow.
Tone
The tone of your letter is friendly and engaging, perfectly fitting the context of writing to a friend about a personal subject.
Descriptive Quality
Your descriptions of the house and neighbourhood are detailed, allowing the reader to visualize the setting and understand your satisfaction with the new place.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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