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The noise level around us is constantly increasing and affecting the quality of our lives. What causes the everyday noise that many people face? What can be done about it?

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The living standards of human beings are largely influenced by the gradual elevation of noise pollution. Today, we are living in the modern era, where everyone wants a comfortable and easy life. Life is so busy that people have no time to stand and stare.
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 want modern facilities and a lavish lifestyle.
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 of using one public transport,
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 preferred to have their own individual cars. More vehicles result in more service on roads. As everyone is in hurry ,so the
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 of horns is common, which results in noise pollution. Another reason is loud
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. community take it as a trend to play high-volume
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 in cars while travelling, as well as in homes. As we have seen at many wedding functions, where people tend to play high-volume opera
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 they start dancing to it. Many other factors like fireworks, the
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 of unpleasant
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, and different sounds produced by factories are
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 included.
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 kind of behaviour has a devasting effect on human lives. We must learn to live a peaceful life. For
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 purpose, we need to do changes on an individual level, it will eventually change the whole community and ultimately the entire population. We should
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 public transport
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 of using our own cars. The
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 of loud
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 should be banned. It will
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 minimize negative effects on our ears. As we all know, "Health is wealth". Traffic police should
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 maintain a nice flow of traffic. We should
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 wait for a smooth flow of traffic when jamming,
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 of giving random horns.
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