Some deem that job pleasure is more important than job society. In contrast ,others think thay having a stable job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In modern society, the job is always playing a significant role in our life. Nowadays, an increasing number of people's discussion

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on whether choosing a stable industry or favourite industry becomes a controversial issue. In my view, an individual's interest is the key to

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phenomenon. An enjoyable task is better than a stable task for a professional career.

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, it is obvious that a pleasurable position brings more motivation and creation. A person who is working in one's favourite field will not feel bored. Contrastively, they might pay more attention and more time to these. All those improvements make them achieve more career goals.

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, a pleasant place is good for psychology healthy.

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, we know some news about persons who suicide that the main reason due to depression disease. These problems always come from strong work pressure and stress.

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, keeping good emotions in daily life is important.

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is not to say that a stable industry is not a good choice. Indeed, a stable production has a stable production environment and stable income. Most of the time , people do not need to worry about the unemployment problem.

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as the government staff, public service department staff and so on. But if you lost your

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position. In sum, what kind of job should

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depend on everyone's decision and future plan. Only by doing what you really love to do, you can get more chances to succeed and gain lots of amazing achievements at the same time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

job satisfaction
financial stability
mental well-being
job security
career fulfillment
work-life balance
motivation
productivity
personal achievements
stress reduction
employment uncertainty
professional growth
positive feedback loop
engagement
fulfillment

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Some deem that job pleasure is more important than job society. In contrast ,others think thay having a stable job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think secondary school students should study international new as one of their subjects, while others believe this is a waste of valuable school time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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