Nowadays shopping has become a new favourite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to encourage young people to develop other hobbies?

In
this
current era,
majority
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of youth prefer spending their free
time
shopping.
This
essay will explain the motives and
also
find some measures to motivate
the
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youngsters
get
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involve
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in other activities. There are several causes why the youths prefer spending
time
doing
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shopping.
Firstly
, because of the consumerism era,
which
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encourages individuals to purchase things,
although
they do not really need them.
As a result
, the youths, who are immature and fueled by the desire to have the latest trends,spend their money on malls.
Moreover
,owing to the stressful work, the shopping habit is perceived as a method to unwind the daily stress.it is undoubtedly, that walking around in the malls, a person forgets about his own problems. Some steps should be taken to
try
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change
thier
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their
perspectives towards spending
time
on
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shopping.
to begin
with, the government should allocate more funds
in
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to
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developing entertainment centres
such
as
theater
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theatre
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,
museum
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museums
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,
art
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and art
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galarie
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galleries
. If whose would be free the youngsters would spend more
time
in
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visiting them.
For example
, once a year in
romania
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Romania
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we have the opening
theater
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theatre
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night, and the queue
are
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is
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full of youth, who are excited.
In addition
,
although
it may upset the companies, can implement a law, which closes the shops at 5pm,
thus
the youngsters could spend more
time
doing outdoor activities. To conclude, there should be more
implication
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implications
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from the
authories
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authorities
regarding the younger generation and
also
the youth should try to change their spending on free
time
activity
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