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Some people think that uniforms in schools are unnecessary and should be banned. T o what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes said that
uniforms
 are compulsory and should be stopped. I personally think
this
 is a good idea be not worn
uniforms
,
however
, I have some reservations. My reasons will be explained in
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, wearing their favourite clothes give the students a better feeling. Since the students are the future of the world, they should be given more choices and freedom to choose theirs in order to make them happy and convey the impression that they are free to do what they want. In one word, freedom causes a lot of advantages in the future.
secondly
,
uniforms
 limit the
student
's physical movements. The students are energetic and always want to play,run,and do some exciting things so they need to be more flexible and stretch their bodies in school.
For example
, the
uniforms
such
 as suits make the
student
 more formal and prevent them from doing any additional acts. So , compelling the
student
 to wear
uniforms
 leads to being inactive.
thirdly
, it can place an excessive financial burden on parents which is sometimes for some people hard to make it. despite all the above, wearing
uniforms
 can increase the concentration of the
student
 and build a unifying and discipline in the school. To sum up,
although
 wearing the same clothes may make the school unify is a good point for schools, it could have detrimental effects on the
student
's physical activities.
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