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People rarely interact with their neighbours and this is a harmful effect for local communities. What are the possible cause and solutions.

Citizens rarely
interconect
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interconnect
 with
nextdoor
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next door
people
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 and
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 is detrimental results for local communities. The main cause is that many adults have two jobs during the week and the most viable
solutions
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solution
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 is to do
community
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 fairs once a month on the weekend. One of the main issues for society is that
people
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 need to work two jobs to be able to pay
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the apartment's
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apartment's
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apartment
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 rent and bills, so
this
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 results that many parents
have
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 no time to interact with
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their neighbour
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neighbour
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neighbours
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, and
this
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 is
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 to our
community
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.
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, many individuals are too busy to be aware of
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community's
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the community's
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necesities
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necessities
 or how they can be part to have
a better surroundings
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a better surrounding
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 for
thsir
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their
 families.
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, many communities face vandalism even during the
day-time
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daytime
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 and
this
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 brought dangerous
people
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 to our homes.
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, In Los Angeles C.A.
recently
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 statistics from Fullerton College
reflects
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reflect
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 that during the day-time homeless
people
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 violate private's gates to try to get a shower or do their laundry, and sometimes they steal
people
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's items. One of the solutions is that
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the community's
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community's
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community
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 citizens create fairs
one
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once
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 a month to gather
people
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's attention and
stablish
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establish
 a monthly meeting and talk about local issues.
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, there is a necessity to provide written information
of
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about
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 vandalism events
on
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every month to raise
people
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's awareness. Another solution is to talk about security improvements in our
community
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 to avoid homeless
people
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be
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being
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 attracted to get into our places and
ammenities
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communities
amenities
.
Eventhough
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Even though
 some high-building apartments have plenty of cameras,
this
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 is not working to resolve these problems. To illustrate, in
Californa
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California
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, many of the managers ask
to
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their tenants to pay for a laundry's key to be able to use the
laundry'romm
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laundry room
 or the pool, and
these help
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that
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destitute
people
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have
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who have
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 no key to open these areas. In conclusion, many individuals need to have two jobs to survive in those days,
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, it is vital to create meetings to get in touch with our neighbours,
and
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apply
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detect issues and find solutions to maintain a secure environment for our
love
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loved
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 ones.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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