Parents should encourage children to spend less time in studies and more time in physical activities. To what extent do you agree?
There is a belief that
,
children Remove the comma
apply
needs
to spend more time in physical activities rather than studying. I would disagree with Change the verb form
need
this
opinion, as studying is as crucial as playing sports or doing any other physical excercises
.
There is a common notion thatCorrect your spelling
exercise
,
every child Remove the comma
apply
have
to take part in outdoor activities, and it is Correct subject-verb agreement
has
the
more important than studying. There needs to be a balance between the classroom and playing a sportCorrect article usage
apply
,
because they both are essential in Remove the comma
apply
overall
development of Add an article
the overall
childrens
life. Correct your spelling
children
children's
However
, if a child has a talent and if he is exceptional at baseball, he should concentrate more on playing the sport, as he can be a successful sportsman and play for his country in the future. Moreover
, physical activity could help in maintining
Correct your spelling
maintaining
health
of Correct article usage
the health
a children
, and not make them obese. Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
For example
, research has proven that,
people who play a sport or Remove the comma
apply
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
excercise
, live longer than those who don't.
Correct your spelling
exercise
On the other hand
, doing only physical activity is not enough to make you successful, as only few
people have the skills and talent to make their career in sports. In fact, a vast majority of the people who play sports at Change the article
a few
younger
age, end up doing Add an article
a younger
mediocore
jobs, because they didn't Correct your spelling
mediocre
paid
attention Change the verb form
pay
on
studies while they were in school. So, studies are Change preposition
to
also
essential
part of Add an article
an essential
childrens
life. Correct your spelling
children's
children
For instance
, every famous businessmen
was good at studies, and their business idea developed during their time at school.
In conclusion, studying and doing physical activities is a balancing act, and both are Change to a singular noun
businessman
necessaary
for the overall development of a child.Correct your spelling
necessary
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