To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Food
crisis due to a rise in population is one of the pressing issues we face as a society. Many
people
believe that to overcome
this
, we should consider
insects
as a
food
choice, while
on the other hand
, few suggest if we do that,
then
it will negatively impact one's health and it'll
also
disrupt the natural
food
cycle. In
this
essay, we will discuss
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and adverse
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of
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unarguably true that,
demand
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for
new
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food
source
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is increasing rapidly. To feed
this
immense population, many
people
argue that we should start consuming edible small creatures especially
insects
as our new
food
source. because it'll reduce the demand
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other
food
sources and eventually it would
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the demand of
growing
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the growing
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population.
For example
, If non-vegetarians start eating
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this insect
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insects
then
they will become less
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on vegetarian
food
sources and that way we can save more
food
to meet
the
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emerging needs.
On the contrary
, some
people
argue that
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having
insect
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insects
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as
a
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food
would badly affect
people
's health. It's hard to know the consequences of eating
such
kinds of
food
.
For example
, as we all know,
people
are allergic to certain kinds of
food
and
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case
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of
insects
, it could be riskier for some
people
.
Moreover
,
production
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of
such
insects
will negatively impact the natural cycle of
food
, and
eventually
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we have to pay the price for it. To conclude,
Although
the urgent need for new
food
sources is alarming, solutions must not ha one's well-being along with
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food
cycle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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