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Band 6.5

You stayed in a hotel and was not satisfied with service. Write a letter to manager. - why you chose this hotel - what problems did you face - tell the manager what to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the services when I stayed in your
hotel
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.I am a regular client of your well-reputed
hotel
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 and it is always on the top of the list whenever I visit Islamabad for business meetings. One of the main reasons to stay at Javson
Hotel
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 is the package of suite you provide.It is quite reasonable and the services are more than satisfactory. Comfortable ambience and
up-to-the mark
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 food quality always attract me. But
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 time, it was very disappointing. Most often I pre-book my room through bookme.com and online payment is transacted. I booked on the 13th of October and my arrival was expected on the 15th
October
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of October
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. A successful transaction was done and I received
confirmation
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a confirmation
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 e-mail on Google. But when I reached on 15th October, the receptionist told me there was no pre-booked room and asked me to wait. I showed him a confirmation e-mail but still he denied it. I contacted the support centre of bookme.com and after waiting for 2 hours; they allowed me to
check in
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. It was quite embarrassing for me. Later, the receptionist apologized for his behaviour but it was not enough for me. You should contact bookme.com and ask them to co-ordinate with your
hotel
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 staff so that people might not face
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 a situation in future. Hoping to see prompt action from your side Yours faithfully, AR

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task achievement
Consider adding more detail about your positive experiences in the past to provide a better contrast with your recent experience.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next, possibly by using connecting phrases for better coherence.
task achievement
The letter maintains a professional tone, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is generally clear with distinct paragraphs for each point you wanted to discuss.
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