Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting the usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Trying alternative
medicine
is a positive development because it helps to cure most
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the disease
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disease
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diseases
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.
This
kind of
medicine
used to be in ancient
time
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times
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.
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,
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of Ayurveda
medicine
start
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in India 5000 years ago. It has
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to cure
disease
, not only
this
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also
taking Ayurveda
herb
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can boost
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system,
as a result
, people live
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free healthy life. To take Chinese medicinal herb take as an example, Chinese people have lived
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long life because they follow the traditional method religiously. Most
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people
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are
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practice ancient
medicine
to cure their
disease
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. Even some medicinal herb has
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special power which is able to
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energy naturally, and on top of
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has no side effect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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