Some educators believe that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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countries, graduated
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have said that children should learn to use
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instrumental. It has some
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benefits
but there will be some drawbacks.
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with, teenagers who can play the instrument since they were young are smarter and more intelligent than usual teens. Based on reality,
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instrumental
music
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need to learn
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signs with tunes. As the result, it seems to be a new language, if students learned more languages, they will be reflexible and smart with well-remembered.
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, a boy who
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to play
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guitar with singing is
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for flirting by recording or calling
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a video with a girl. In fact, influencers on
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Youtube cover English
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are been charming and are felt in love
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female audiences.
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, kids need more times to study and read more books.
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a student does not waste time
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studying to not relevant subjects at school, it will make him or her
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get
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score
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, the price of
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piano and the rest of
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instrumental
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are not reasonable.
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parents are hard to support financial for their children
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musical learning. To summarise, the musical instrument
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many
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supporting ideas
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recently, it can
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to
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time and family
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. So, I agree
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the topic above, because learning
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make
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kids smart and cheerful after class. I am a
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lover as well, I give a
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up for listening to
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when you have
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spare time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educators
  • taught
  • play a musical instrument
  • benefits
  • cognitive skills
  • academic performance
  • physical coordination
  • motor skills
  • discipline
  • perseverance
  • express themselves
  • self-confidence
  • stress relief
  • relaxation
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • inclusivity
  • equal access
  • arts education
  • practical challenges
  • implementing
  • universal
  • balance
  • mandatory
  • academic subjects
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