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Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystem, animals and plants across the world. Some people believe that cannot be changed while others feel that we can still take action protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Environment
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 has the biggest share in
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the extension
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 of human life.
Never the less
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, due to
humankind
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humankind's
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 activities
has
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 had a negative effect on our planet. It is often argued by some people that we can take some actions to preserve the environment.
However
, others think that it cannot be alternated.
This
 essay will highlight both
the
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aspects and give some
revelant
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relevant
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former
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 opinion, many people believe that
animals
 and plants are disappearing is a natural process. People cannot do anything to prevent them.
This
 is because
food
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the food
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 chain is a natural process and it is very crucial to balance
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the ecosystem
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ecosystem
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ecosystems
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.
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, a survey
was
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conducted by the National forest department it was found that the diminished of dinosaurs is due to
increase
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an increase
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the
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 temperature of
earth
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the earth
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. So
that
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,
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a human
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human
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humans
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 cannot do anything to preserve them.
On the
contrary
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 those who are in favour of
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letter
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 opinion that they have their own argument. They believe that we can prevent our planet by taking some actions
such
 as do not cut down
the
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trees to prevent soil erosion.
Furthermore
,
by
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 building
zoo
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 for
animals
 and
provide
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 a peaceful environment to increase the number of rare
animals
.
For instance
, the
USA
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US
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 government started a survey to protect tigers. Due to
this
 about 90%
species
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of species
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 of tigers were found in the United States To conclude, it is crucial to
save
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saving
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 the earth
by
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through
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 human activities to prevent our ecosystem, plants and
animals
.
such
 as, to stop to release the access amount of poison gases.
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