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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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In the near future, transportation vehicles will not require a driver, and only passengers will be allowed in them.
This
 situation might have beneficial or harmful effects on
the
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society.
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this
 estimation and explain my stance.
Scients
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Scientists
 have developed numerous
driveless
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cars
 over the years aiming some benefits to
the
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society. If smart
cars
 are used in
the
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traffic, they might reduce the number of traffic
accidents
 because they have an algorithm to provide them
drive
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 carefully.
On the other hand
, humans might lose their concentration after long journeys and
this
 can result in
accidents
. An eminent example of
this
Tesla’s
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cars
. They are able to keep track
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 speeds of every car they realised on the road,
this
 enables them to realise the earlier signs of
accidents
.
However
,
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 vehicles might exacerbate
the
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environmental problems
such
 as air pollution because
their
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 fuel consumption more than other vehicles and
this
 consumption is their drawback.
For instance
, a regular bus
consume
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 oil for only energy, but a driverless vehicle has two tanks, one for their
algoryhtm
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algorithm
algorithms
 to drive the car.
This
 doubles the effect of fossil liquids and damages the environment. From my point of view,
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transportation without
human
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a human
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work force
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 has a huge advantage compared to its flaws. Because
this
enable
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 us to demonstrate a future without
the
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traffic
accidents
resulted
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 in human loss and economic loss. In conclusion,
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future transportation methods will be changed by
cars
 with artificial intelligence and
this
 transformation will provide people
a
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safe life.
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