Some people believe that the responsibility is with the government to control the rise in obesity in children, others think the parents are the cause. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In my
first
year
of
university
, I was able to participate in a teamwork project which was based on building a Goldberg machine at
university
which we had to work on it about 4 months.
Also
, I had to design plenty of industrial pieces with AutoCAD software as assignments. During my
first
year
of
university
, I had to work due to financial problems.
Therefore
, I had limited time to study my courses but in my
second
year
, I proceeded on a different path in order to cover improve my GPA.
Furthermore
, in my
last
year
of
university
, I had practical projects to design casting mould and casting industrial pieces, and welding projects using SMAW which were mainly about joining various parts and examining the weld pool strength and the quality of it. During my
second
year
in
university
, I started my project in additive manufacturing in the Hot deformation laboratory. At the time, I was the
first
and only bachelor student there. So,
this
situation made me deep into my studies in order to be acknowledged.
Additionally
, I was fortunate enough to learn from many well-educated graduate students and my professor Dr Zarei-Hanzaki. Not only I gained experience in my field of study, but
also
I learned various precious pieces of information about my colleagues’ projects and problems
such
as
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, high entropy, lightweight, magnesium, stainless steel alloys, advanced characterizations, and fatigue.
Thus
, I consider myself an undergraduate student with compatible knowledge in comprehending advanced characterizations
such
as EBSD, APT, and TEM.
Furthermore
, I have worked with FSP, and wire cut machines, and I have 2-
year
experience
in
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working at a metallography laboratory during my project. After spending two years, I
finally
submitted my paper which is “The effect of heat treatments on the Room and high-temperature mechanical properties of AlSi10Mg alloy fabricated by selective laser melting” under the supervision of Professor Abbas Zarei-Hanzaki (under review in the journal of material research and technology with the impact factor of 6.2).
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