Some people believe that the responsibility is with the government to control the rise in obesity in children, others think the parents are the cause. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, I was able to participate in a teamwork project which was based on building a Goldberg machine at
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, I had to design plenty of industrial pieces with AutoCAD software as assignments. During my
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, I had practical projects to design casting mould and casting industrial pieces, and welding projects using SMAW which were mainly about joining various parts and examining the weld pool strength and the quality of it. During my
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, I was fortunate enough to learn from many well-educated graduate students and my professor Dr Zarei-Hanzaki. Not only I gained experience in my field of study, but
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, high entropy, lightweight, magnesium, stainless steel alloys, advanced characterizations, and fatigue.
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working at a metallography laboratory during my project. After spending two years, I
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submitted my paper which is “The effect of heat treatments on the Room and high-temperature mechanical properties of AlSi10Mg alloy fabricated by selective laser melting” under the supervision of Professor Abbas Zarei-Hanzaki (under review in the journal of material research and technology with the impact factor of 6.2).
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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