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A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. she is planning to stay with you, but you can not accomodate her. write a letter to her tell her the reasons apologise make alternative arrangements

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Dear Sejal, Greetings ! I hope you are pink in your health. I am really very happy
by hearing
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to hear
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 you are coming to India
at the end
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 of
this
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 month. I am writing
this
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 letter to apologize to you because I am not able to
stay
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keep
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 you with me. Let me explain the reasons.
Firstly
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, There is the price of house rent is increasing day by day. So, we are living in a very small place nowadays. We are three girls living in a very small apartment. There is only one bedroom with a kitchen only and we have only three beds and not much more facilities
such
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 as TV, A.C. and many more in my small apartment.
According to
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 me, You will not feel comfortable with me.
Furthermore
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, my home is very far from the city area which takes
2 hour
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2-hour
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 journey if you want to go
for
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apply
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shopping or explore new areas of my city. I really feel sorry for giving excuses but you know my nature.
According to
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 me, you are coming to India after 5 years and you should stay in a very comfortable place which provides all facilities. If you do not mind living with my other friend Sonal, Who is living in the city area. She is living in
two
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a
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bedroom
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two-bedroom
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 flat with two girls only. So, you can get your own personal with good facilities. I know her very well, you will definitely enjoy her company
as well as
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 I will
also
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 come for a few days to stay with you. I am waiting for your earliest reply
for arranging
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 accommodation for you. Regards, Rashmi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea or theme to improve clarity and coherence.
task response
Address all aspects of the task prompt, and maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter. Also, recheck the organization of ideas for coherence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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