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some people think it is alright to spend money for their wants, such as a new car or the latest gadjet. other think it is a better to save the money and only buy what they really need. which opinion do you agree with and why ? give specific details and examples in your answer.

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In today's present era, Everyone has their own choices and preferences to live their
life
. There are some groups of the community who strongly believe that it is a good thing to expense
money
 on a luxurious lifestyle. According to some groups of
people
, they wish to save
money
 and spend it when it is necessary. I shall discuss both views in the following paragraphs. Nowadays, Everyone is craving a better
life
 and they emphasise living their
life
 their own way with inner satisfaction,
such
 as to fulfil their inner desire if they want to buy expensive gadgets or branded cars and they will do it at any cost. Sometimes some
people
 expense
money
 to show their status or to be stable in society.
For instance
, one of my friend's father is a builder by profession so he has to live a levis lifestyle to show his status in society. On the other ,side some
people
 do not have more
money
 but they buy it at any cost by imitating their friends and family.
However
, there are some groups of
people
 who believe that
people
 should save
money
 for their future emergencies because
Life
 is always unpredictable. Sometimes the habit of spending lots of
money
 on unnecessary things a person become a spendthrift which will create lots of problems for an individual's
life
. To conclude, Evey coin has two sides but I strongly agree with we should spend
money
 on the required things only. Everyone has their own perceptions and plans for living their
life
. So,
people
 should expense their
money
 by planning only and fulfilling their wishes according to their budget.
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