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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is debated that
people
 who do the agenda in a
group
 learn more crucial skills, but someone who finishes the activity by himself gets less. I personally agree with
this
 statement to some extent, and I will explain the reasons in
this
 essay. On the one hand, it is true that some crucial skills are received when
people
 work in a team
such
 as communication and leadership which are needed in social life.
Group
 usually consists of a leader, manager, member, and so on that has different responsibilities, so someone who becomes a chief gains experience
about
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 how to divide the job based on his member’s ability and how to deliver an order politely.
In addition
, meeting various talented
people
 teaches each other new talents which are not mastered. In a
group
, teammates can share their expertise alternately, so each member trains many kinds of talents.
For instance
, a singer in a
group
 learns to play
guitar
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 from his partner who is more expert.
On the other hand
, we should not ignore that there is an activity which is
more
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preferable to do solitary,
such
 as a practice that needs greater focus. Calculating monthly costs is better to finish by ourselves to get the accurate result
,
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 because
other person
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another person
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 can interrupt frequently. In summary, it seems to me that
group
 work is
worthy
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 because it offers many positives
such
 as learning good interaction and new skills from the expert. Even though, sometimes,
people
 should end their business personally on
special
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 occasion
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