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students are becoming more and more reliant on technologhy.What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers,and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Technology
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 is part of everyday life. It is fact that in the modern technical era
students
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 are more dependent on technologies
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 as computers, laptops, and cell phones, which provide them with a convenient lifestyle in place of self-reliance. There are several reasons for
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 a situation and
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 a few visible influences too. Both aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraph. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is
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 are more reliant on modern
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 for doing easy homework.
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 is because if the child has any problem in writing spelling at that time he uses the spelling corrector without taking any stress or thoughts.
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 thing is to reduce the cognitive skills of
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. The other cause is computed not to replace original skilled teachers because only trained teachers know about the material that
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 needed and at which time they use it,
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 laptops are more costly compared to
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 and other stationery. The mentioned problems have some solutions too. The foremost solution is for parents or teachers to be more aware of
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 and reading.
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, schools should organize some book exhibition tours but teach them about the importance of
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 in life rather than
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. The other repercussion is played some damage to eyes drama on automation education vs original book learning.
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, to conclude the topic, it can be
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 commented that youngsters use more
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 for education and has bad effects. So we should prefer reading
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 and writing some letters for practice
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 some skills are destroyed in future.
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