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students are becoming more and more reliant on technologhy.What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers,and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Technology
 is part of everyday life. It is fact that in the modern technical era
students
 are more dependent on technologies
such
 as computers, laptops, and cell phones, which provide them with a convenient lifestyle in place of self-reliance. There are several reasons for
such
 a situation and
also
 a few visible influences too. Both aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraph. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is
students
 are more reliant on modern
technology
 for doing easy homework.
This
 is because if the child has any problem in writing spelling at that time he uses the spelling corrector without taking any stress or thoughts.
This
 thing is to reduce the cognitive skills of
students
. The other cause is computed not to replace original skilled teachers because only trained teachers know about the material that
students
 needed and at which time they use it,
Moreover
 laptops are more costly compared to
books
 and other stationery. The mentioned problems have some solutions too. The foremost solution is for parents or teachers to be more aware of
books
 and reading.
For example
, schools should organize some book exhibition tours but teach them about the importance of
books
 in life rather than
technology
. The other repercussion is played some damage to eyes drama on automation education vs original book learning.
Thus
, to conclude the topic, it can be
finally
 commented that youngsters use more
technology
 for education and has bad effects. So we should prefer reading
books
 and writing some letters for practice
otherwise
 some skills are destroyed in future.
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