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Today, both men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
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 have changed their minds and they support
women
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 working in the field. Some think that
women
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 are able to do all types of jobs as
men
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. I am in favour of
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 point of view because it would change the mentality of
people
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 who think that females only do house chores rather than filed
work
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To begin
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 with, the government should
also
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 support
this
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 view and it gives a lot of laws. In India, some government quotas are reserved for female seats.
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, in the government civil services and
people
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 department, 30% of seats are reserved by
women
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.
On the contrary
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, the corporate sector
such
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 as IT firms now it is full of females rather than males. These days , girls are
also
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 admitted to engineering with hard branches like civil engineering, mechanical and electrical engineering. After they finish their graduation, they
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 choose a corporate job. Earlier, in these filed
work
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 only
men
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 were because it was not a white-collar job.
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, the comparisons of
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's and
women
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's strengths. It would be less than males. So, when working by strength
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 as in mining, factory and machinery that place
women
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 are less capable than
men
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.
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,
people
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 who live in rural areas, have their
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 mentality unchanged.
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,
women
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 live in that part who do not have skills and education.
As a result
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, they are not capable of doing jobs and
work
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. In conclusion, these days equality has been common in the world.
Women
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 have great personalities because they are females who job and
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 take care of their families and do house chores.
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, I agree with
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 point sexes are not determine the
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 and
women
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 are equally treated in the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • professional abilities
  • personal skills
  • qualifications
  • success stories
  • stereotypes
  • perceptions
  • education and training
  • gender differences
  • social benefits
  • economic benefits
  • gender-diverse workplaces
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