Some people think that
teenagers
should do
community
work which is unpaid in their free time
that is
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way to give the
community
some benefits.
Furthermore
the
teenagers
will obtain many experiences in communication with others and doing new things.
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of
teenagers
need to know how to communicate with others in the best way and how to do many things.
Firstly
, when some
teenagers
volunteer to clear
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, streets or beaches, they will feel happy.
Therefore
, they will clean their rooms to get
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happiness.
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, many
teenagers
should do basic work without
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money
to can be independent in the future.
For example
, when some
teenagers
cook at a restaurant, they will obtain many information of
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that is
good for them in
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days.
Finally
,
many people want
money
to work, but when
teenagers
do not get any
money
for their
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, they will
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normally
to Fix the infinitive
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do something unpaid. On another hand, the
community
receives benefits as well from unpaid
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, so people and
teenagers
who have free time have to do something for their
community
to improve the pleasure between others.
Furthermore
, unpaid
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the relationship in the
community
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the cooperation and the improvement in their life. In conclusion, there are many opinions about unpaid
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by
teenagers
who have free time, but in my opinion, I
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with working without
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a Remove the article
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money
since it is important to improve
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living.