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There are millions of vehicles on the road nowadays, and the number is predicted to increase in the future. Many argue that alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The phenomenon of the improvement of a continued rise in cars on the road has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I totally agree with the idea that limiting
people
's buying and
use
 of cars. Of all the reasons why I support
car
 ownership and
use
 should be controlled, probably the most significant one is that it can break the dead loop on
this
 issue. Too many vehicles are the main factor causing to
people
 spend extra time commuting, and
people
 buy cars because they want to save time.
However
, a huge number of transportation on the road is the cause of traffic jam and
also
 increase the duration that
people
 go to school and work.
Therefore
, it is important to remain the ratio of vehicles and
people
.
For example
, the government enforces a law to limit each family of four can only own one
car
.
This
 will, in turn, decrease the demand for the
car
 park and alleviate the problem of traffic jams. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that reducing
car
 ownership is environmental health.
For example
,
car
 moving needs to burn fossil fuels and release carbon dioxide into the air which contributes to air pollution. So, the government should encourage
people
 to
use
 public transportation in order to reduce the damage to the environment.
As a result
, each
people
 should play their role to attempt to protect the environment. Under
this
 line of thinking, It seems to me that there is no point for a family to own multiple vehicles, so I completely agree that we should support the government establish a series of control rules to control
car
 ownership and
use
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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