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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as a human, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including use for foods and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #animals #rights #humans #foods #research
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Animals
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 are
the
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 basic need and
essential
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 part of society. Most individuals argue that
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animals
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animals'
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right
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rights
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 are the same as
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humans'
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humans
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 as well as they are not exploited by folks.
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, a group of people say that
animals
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 are only used for food and research and to fulfil other needs of mankind. In my opinion, I strongly agree that
animals
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 and
humans
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 should have the same rights.
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 and foremost, I would like to say that every living creature in
this
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 world should be treated in the same way. Rules and regulations are not only for mankind but
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 for other creatures that play a significant role in making our society and culture. All the living organisms in
this
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 universe have some requirements.
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, in some nations dogs and cats are assumed to be waste and even most people kill them and run away from their vicinity.
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, in spite of
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 they are faithful, as well as they are
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 used in several medicines that are mainly used to save
humans
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 life. On the flip side, most folks thought that
animals
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 and other living brutes accept
humans
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 have no rights. They all should be treated in the same way. They can only be used to fulfil the requirements of people as well as in research. They cannot think that the thing
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 used for their basic needs, has some rights.
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, several
animals
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 are used for food and other needs. It's our obligation to save them and to protect them from every danger. At
last
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, I evaluate that
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,
animals
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 are not like
humans
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 and they have no sense, despite
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they must be treated in the same way as
humans
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. The government should take it seriously and it's the obligation of authorities to define some rules and regulations for
animals
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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