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An increasing number of people are changing their careers during their working time. What causes this trend and is it a positive or negative development?

#people #careers #time #trend #development
The diagrams illustrate information about how the number of people in the world, how they spend, and the way they use
resources
. Overall, Asia has the highest population rate though it is not part of the
continents
 that consume a lot of
resources
.
To begin
 with, the universe spends about half of the money
in
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 food and transport with 24 and 18 per cent respectively. Followed by others with just 40
percent
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. When it comes to clothing and housing, less capital is used. Moving on, Asia has more than half of its people occupying the world, followed by America and Europe
continents
 with both 14 per cent each. Africa and other
continents
 have a small population of 10% and 5% in that order. Coming to the usage of
resources
, both Europe and the USA consume more than 60% though they have
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population
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. Other
continents
 spend just 40% on
resources
. Asia,
however
, is not mentioned as one of the
continents
 that use a lot of
resources
 even though it has a lot of people.
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