Some think that private companies should pay for cleaning up pollution, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There existed a difficult problem related to the
pollution
issues that it is the government’s
responsibility
or private companies to clean it. In my opinion, I would argue that it is
companies’
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responsibility
and
also
for
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our
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. On the one hand, We all know that each month we are required to pay taxes
for
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to
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the government, so they can use that money to maintain some political activities, countries’
economy
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economies
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and for several purposes.
For example
, we have to pay taxes for the police to maintain
the
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security,
we
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and we
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pay for workers to build and clean our
street
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streets
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, so it is not relatively strange that
our
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the
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taxes we paid include fees for environmental fixes. For
this
reason
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I think it’s the government’s
responsibility
to clean up the
pollution
.
On the other hand
,
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the government
having
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to handle the
pollution
problem, every person in a company should give them a hand to protect our atmosphere. We live together and the environment is the same for every individual, so we need to act for environmental protection because of these reasons.
First
,
pollution
can harmfully affect our health and it’s our
responsibility
to cope with our health problems.
In addition
, if everyone joins hands to solve the problem of environmental
pollution
, we do not need to depend on the government to intervene because they have so many other things to do. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that it is the
responsibility
of private companies to tackle climate
pollution
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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