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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

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It is hard to deny that all cars and buses on the rand need a driver to control direction.
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 a fact leads impressionable people to generate
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 that there must need someone driving in the transportation.
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,
such
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logical
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 and facilities and should be examined meticulously. As far as technology and
feasibilty
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feasibility
 are concerned, I strongly hold that driverless would
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 a positive effect
in
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 the world.
First
 and foremost, technology has been
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developing
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 rapidly and
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 many people's jobs will be replaced by machines. To be more specific,
recent
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in recent
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 years there has now
techinque
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technique
 which is autopilot,
it
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 means that the public
don't
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 need to control the direction by themself but the
equipments
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equipment
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 will help.
As a result
, if the person's career is to be a driver, they will lose their job because of the high-tech Innovation, which can automatically detect the situation on the road to make a judgment.
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, using autopilot won't be aware of
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an accident
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accident
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 like drunk driving.
Furthermore
, the fact that the probability of feasibility is very high indicates that the population would accept the various
technoloy
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technology
 which
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 been more and more common. To be more specific, the news
have
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 been
report
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 lots of traffic accidents which
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cause
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 by human factors.
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, the mechanical calculation would be safer and more appropriate. In a
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 maintains that the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. I believe that new devices will let our transport more convenient and safe.
Moreover
, promoting the world to be more motivated to
developing
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 new products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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