In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

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It is hard to deny that all cars and buses on the rand need a driver to control direction.
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that there must need someone driving in the transportation.
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,
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and facilities and should be examined meticulously. As far as technology and
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feasibility
are concerned, I strongly hold that driverless would
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a positive effect
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the world.
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and foremost, technology has been
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rapidly and
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many people's jobs will be replaced by machines. To be more specific,
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years there has now
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which is autopilot,
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means that the public
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need to control the direction by themself but the
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will help.
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, if the person's career is to be a driver, they will lose their job because of the high-tech Innovation, which can automatically detect the situation on the road to make a judgment.
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, using autopilot won't be aware of
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an accident
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accident
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like drunk driving.
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, the fact that the probability of feasibility is very high indicates that the population would accept the various
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technology
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been more and more common. To be more specific, the news
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been
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lots of traffic accidents which
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by human factors.
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, the mechanical calculation would be safer and more appropriate. In a
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maintains that the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. I believe that new devices will let our transport more convenient and safe.
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, promoting the world to be more motivated to
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new products.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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