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Modern technology have made people less social over the years. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Gross motor
skill
 She uses non-locomotor
skill
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 to take the toys and to drink water. She stands up and sits on the floor. Fine motor
skill
 She picks up, takes, holds, drops, and puts down the toy by using
pincer
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 grasp
skill
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 as well as grabs, rises, and flies the toys by using palmer grass skills. Intellectual Development He can engage pretend play within 20 minutes as well as a long attention span. She is able to recall her memory by saying not only “Teacher says not to run with scissors” but
also
 “I fell down 5 times and cried”. She recognizes her friends' names by saying “Anna & Hanna”. She can lead her to play and she can
also
 respond to her
mother
's questions. She can speak clearly by using 4 or 5 sentences and questions. She
also
 knows the colours by saying green, and purple. Emotional Development She demonstrates her happiness with a smile while playing as well as shows an angry face when her
mother
 cannot answer her question. She
also
 knows the emotions of herself and others by saying “The unicorns don’t cry when they were hurt but she cried when she fell down.” She can mention what she likes and dislike by saying “I like unicorns Social development She acknowledges her
mother
 not only to communicate but
also
 asks her
mother
 to repeat her words as well as give eye content.
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