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some sporting events famous it is negative impact or positive give your opinion

#events #impact
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cause
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of
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worldwide land degradation and what cause
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land
degendation
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degradation
degeneration
 by region. From
overall
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prospective
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, including four reasons why the grassland is decreasing and divided into three groups
which
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in the South Pacific including Australia and New Zealand. Looking at the pie chart in more detail, we can see the biggest problem is over-grazing, which is the
places
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 that
used
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 to
feeding
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 livestock worldwide and accounted for 35%. The
second
 is deforestation, which material is very popular in
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manufactures.
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, over-cultivation, in order to satisfy the population in the world, more and more places are being used
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 farming. The
last
,
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 is the other 7% includes plenty of reasons
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Furthermore
, the table shows the total land degraded in Europe is 23%, and 9.8% is deforestation.
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, Oceania has no places
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on
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 farming, but 11.3% is
over-harvestning
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over-harvesting
 and
the
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all unhealthy ground accounted
13
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%. North
American
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America
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 have only 5% part of
forest
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been
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ruined.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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