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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The illustration shows a community
website
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is
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being
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being visited
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visits
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ample
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an ample
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of
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people. Here, it is shown
that
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apply
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how many people are
visits
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 the
first
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 and
second
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year
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years
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to
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of
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 the community
website
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. The
information
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 given here is the main features where we can see
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number
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the number
a number
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 of
visits
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,
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number
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the number
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 of people, and
also
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usage
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the usage
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 of
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first
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the first
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year
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 and
second
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year
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.
In addition
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, the
information
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 contradicts
with
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each other very fairly. The charts
shows
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show
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 some comparison where we can see, in the
month
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 of January, the
number
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 of
first
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year
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 of use the
website
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 is very minimum than
the
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in the
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second
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year
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.
This
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 is how every
month
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's illustration
is being showed
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is being shown
is showing
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 here. By selecting and reporting the main features, relevant
comparison
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comparisons
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 can
be identify
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be identified
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 easily. Here, we can see the
month
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 of February's
information
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 where the
number
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 of
first
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year
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 of
use
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using
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 the
website
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 is very low,
whereas
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 the
second
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year
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 of use is very high than the previous one. We can see almost
9000
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a 9000
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gap
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gaps
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 from
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first
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the first
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year
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 to
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second
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the second
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. On top of that, if we look at the
month
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 of August, we can see a clear picture of the difference between
two
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the two
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 years. Here, we can see
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first
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the first
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year
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 the
number
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 of
visits
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 to a community
website
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 is higher than
the
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in the
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second
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year
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.
However
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, the range of the
number
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 is not that much noticeable. Only about
1000
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a 1000
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/2000 gap is being seen from
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first
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the first
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year
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 to
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second
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the second
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 one. In conclusion, we can say that the gap is almost
same
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the same
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 from
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first
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the first
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year
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 to
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second
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the second
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, and
second
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year
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 to
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first
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the first
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year
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.
This
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 is the relevant comparison between two years, and
summarization
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a summarization
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 of the
information
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 given here.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words website, visits, first, second, year, information, number, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • decline
  • trend
  • notable
  • consistent
  • significant
  • contrast
  • stabilize
  • visits
  • community website
  • first year
  • second year
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