The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
The illustration shows a community
website
is
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being
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being visited
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visits
by
ample
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an ample
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of
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people. Here, it is shown
that
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how many people are
visits
the
first
and
second
year
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years
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to
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of
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the community
website
. The
information
given here is the main features where we can see
number
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the number
a number
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of
visits
,
number
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the number
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of people, and
also
usage
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the usage
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of
first
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the first
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year
and
second
year
.
In addition
, the
information
contradicts
with
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each other very fairly. The charts
shows
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some comparison where we can see, in the
month
of January, the
number
of
first
year
of use the
website
is very minimum than
the
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in the
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second
year
.
This
is how every
month
's illustration
is being showed
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is being shown
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here. By selecting and reporting the main features, relevant
comparison
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can
be identify
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be identified
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easily. Here, we can see the
month
of February's
information
where the
number
of
first
year
of
use
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using
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the
website
is very low,
whereas
the
second
year
of use is very high than the previous one. We can see almost
9000
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a 9000
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gap
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gaps
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from
first
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the first
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year
to
second
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the second
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. On top of that, if we look at the
month
of August, we can see a clear picture of the difference between
two
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the two
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years. Here, we can see
first
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the first
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year
the
number
of
visits
to a community
website
is higher than
the
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in the
show examples
second
year
.
However
, the range of the
number
is not that much noticeable. Only about
1000
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a 1000
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/2000 gap is being seen from
first
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the first
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year
to
second
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the second
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one. In conclusion, we can say that the gap is almost
same
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the same
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from
first
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the first
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year
to
second
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the second
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, and
second
year
to
first
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the first
show examples
year
.
This
is the relevant comparison between two years, and
summarization
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a summarization
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of the
information
given here.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words website, visits, first, second, year, information, number, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • decline
  • trend
  • notable
  • consistent
  • significant
  • contrast
  • stabilize
  • visits
  • community website
  • first year
  • second year
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