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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the improvements in the transportation system nowadays
people
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 can easily travel to distant locations using different methods like using a car, an aeroplane, a train and
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 a ship.
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,
people
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 are more likely to travel in the holidays when they have some leisure.
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 , these improvements in the transport industry would increase the cost of tickets for distant locations and some
people
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 would rather have vacations in their own county which is more budget-friendly and
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 there is the matter of getting a visa and booking accommodation in a foreign country. Even though with the problems said, in the future with the help of the internet
people
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 can overcome these issues and easily apply for a visa, book a hotel, reserve flight tickets and gather useful information on their destination country
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 they can look for offers and sales on accommodation to have a cheaper holiday.
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, nowadays I think
people
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 from different countries are getting closer to each other and it is because of the internet,
people
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 are getting to know different cultures and
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, they can search and find new locations around the world with great details with just a single click on their computers or smartphones. In conclusion, I think in the future there are going to be more
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 doing international travel
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 of spending a holiday in their own country.
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