You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir/Ma'am, Hope you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to give you feedback regarding your culinary course which I have done 6 months back. I want to let you know that in your classes I learnt a myriad of

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to cook

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I got to know about new techniques of cooking and chopping which were quite interesting for me.

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, In your

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, every student got a chance to make

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personally and that was a new experience for every student of your

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. After completing the cookery

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I made many

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Italian, Indo- Chinese, South Indian and many more. I used techniques which I learnt from your chefs and my friends and family loved my all

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. I want to give you

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that kindly add a backing and Plate decoration course

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your culinary

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. As you know nowadays big restaurants serve their

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in a very unique way because every customer is attracted by

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. I hope you will accept my suggestion as soon as possible.

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, I want to join

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course in your

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. Yours Faithfully, Ziva Shah.

kaverigoti2209Fri Jul 19 2024

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Be more specific in describing what you enjoyed about the course, perhaps by mentioning particular dishes or techniques that stood out to you.

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Ensure consistency in formality; start your letter with 'Dear Sir or Madam' and end with 'Yours sincerely' for a more polished tone.

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Work on structuring your paragraphs more clearly to avoid run-on sentences and improve readability. For example, separating your feedback on the course from your suggestions for improvement.

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Consider using transition words like 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,' to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.

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You provided detailed examples of the types of cuisine you have cooked since the course, which helps to illustrate the skills you gained.

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Your suggestion for adding a baking and plate decoration course is well-thought-out and relevant, showing your engagement and forward-thinking.

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Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and provides a polite and hopeful note to end on.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

192 words

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