You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

Dear Sir/Ma'am, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter to give you feedback regarding your culinary course which I have done 6 months back. I want to let you know that in your classes I learnt a myriad of
dishes
to cook
as well as
I got to know about new techniques of cooking and chopping which were quite interesting for me.
Moreover
, In your
class
, every student got a chance to make
dishes
personally and that was a new experience for every student of your
class
. After completing the cookery
class
I made many
dishes
such
as
,
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Italian, Indo- Chinese, South Indian and many more. I used techniques which I learnt from your chefs and my friends and family loved my all
dishes
. I want to give you
suggestion
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that kindly add a backing and Plate decoration course
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your culinary
class
. As you know nowadays big restaurants serve their
dishes
in a very unique way because every customer is attracted by
this
. I hope you will accept my suggestion as soon as possible.
Thus
, I want to join
this
course in your
class
. Yours Faithfully, Ziva Shah.
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Be more specific in describing what you enjoyed about the course, perhaps by mentioning particular dishes or techniques that stood out to you.
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Ensure consistency in formality; start your letter with 'Dear Sir or Madam' and end with 'Yours sincerely' for a more polished tone.
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Work on structuring your paragraphs more clearly to avoid run-on sentences and improve readability. For example, separating your feedback on the course from your suggestions for improvement.
coherence cohesion
Consider using transition words like 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,' to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
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You provided detailed examples of the types of cuisine you have cooked since the course, which helps to illustrate the skills you gained.
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Your suggestion for adding a baking and plate decoration course is well-thought-out and relevant, showing your engagement and forward-thinking.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and provides a polite and hopeful note to end on.
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