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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is well known that nowadays, a number of people believe that the money
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 spent on wedding parties and new year parties is just a waste.
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, others think that it is necessary to celebrate these
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, so it is acceptable to spend it. In
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essay I will discuss both views and give my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, some
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 only come at one time in the individuals' lives which is why these
events
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 should be celebrated. to explain,
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 like marriage come only a single time in a person's life, and because of ,
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 they want to enjoy it and waste a lot of their saving on it.
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, someone wants to celebrate their success with their love-ones
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 as through promotion.
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, a survey by the university of Congo revealed that in 2021 more than 80% family said that they can celebrate all the
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 with joy as they come only once.
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, the population deems that these
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 cause a lot of garbage left over and damage the environment as these
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 need too much food and at the end of the event often tons of waste are produced.
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, sometimes they celebrate
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 like the new year party by bursting firecrackers which creates air pollution.
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 it considers a loss of finance and detrimental to the earth. In conclusion,
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 I am of opinion that we should celebrate
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, we should take care that we do not harm nature.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • frivolous
  • lavish
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • consumerism
  • unrealistic
  • social bonds
  • milestones
  • local businesses
  • celebrate
  • memorable
  • nostalgic
  • cherish
  • community
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