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Now a lot of people in college are donig accademc study. We should encourage them to learn vacational skill (like plumbers and electricians). Do you agree or disagree?

#people #college #donig #accademc #study #skill #plumbers #electricians
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 modern era, a lot of
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 study in colleges. Officials should provide them with suitable plans to educate some extra skills.
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 matter leads to good results for the
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 because they will be able to solve their problems by themselves and experience a better life.
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 of all, everyone will be faced with numerous problems in their daily life.
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,
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 always have trouble with their electrical devices and if they passed courses about electricians, they will fix them very easily. They
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 can save their money and spend on other things because fixing prices are so high and with
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ability you will not need other
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.Learning new skills make
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 creative, innovative and self-confident and
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 gives them
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problem-solving ability,
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, academic courses make them expert in their fields they are not enough.
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 can have incomes from these types of work as in college you cannot be active in your field, they will help you to cover your costs and even save some money for your future.
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 can consider these
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 as a hobby and fill their free time,
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 they will feel happy and fulfilled because they did useful
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.These extra curriculum classes help to raise the student's efficiency in their main, major
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 because academic colleges should be careful about all aspects of the student's life, even though
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 will consume their time. In conclusion, organising a schedule with various types of
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 will be helpful for
students
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 and colleges. It influences their lives remarkably and sustains their future ways.
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, having information about other areas makes you stronger and happier than in the past.
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