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Now a lot of people in college are donig accademc study. We should encourage them to learn vacational skill (like plumbers and electricians). Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era, a lot of
people
 study in colleges. Officials should provide them with suitable plans to educate some extra skills.
This
 matter leads to good results for the
students
 because they will be able to solve their problems by themselves and experience a better life.
First
 of all, everyone will be faced with numerous problems in their daily life.
For instance
,
people
 always have trouble with their electrical devices and if they passed courses about electricians, they will fix them very easily. They
also
 can save their money and spend on other things because fixing prices are so high and with
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ability you will not need other
people
.Learning new skills make
students
 creative, innovative and self-confident and
also
 gives them
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problem-solving ability,
although
, academic courses make them expert in their fields they are not enough.
Students
 can have incomes from these types of work as in college you cannot be active in your field, they will help you to cover your costs and even save some money for your future.
People
 can consider these
activities
 as a hobby and fill their free time,
besides
 they will feel happy and fulfilled because they did useful
activities
.These extra curriculum classes help to raise the student's efficiency in their main, major
,
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 because academic colleges should be careful about all aspects of the student's life, even though
activities
 will consume their time. In conclusion, organising a schedule with various types of
activities
 will be helpful for
students
 and colleges. It influences their lives remarkably and sustains their future ways.
Also
, having information about other areas makes you stronger and happier than in the past.
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