Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Children
who go to
school
every day not only face up with stress from studying but
also
many of them deal with bullying which has
negative
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a negative
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impact on both
physical
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the physical
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body,
mind
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and mind
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. In
this
essay, I would like to show my
thinking
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about its causes and
solutions
for it. Bullying has many various causes
such
as violent game ->
games
, their family, loss
in
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manegemant
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management
-> management of
school
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the school
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. Nowadays, numerous
pupils
play
games
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at in
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in
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an
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early age, and it has
negative
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a negative
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impact on their character. The pupil
think
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life is the same as
games
and damaging others does not cause serious consequences.
Second
, family violence and conflict between parents
also
make their
children
's mind
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problems
.
Therefore
, bullying reflects their family and life condition.
However
, the management of the
school
is
also
one of the causes
for
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these
problems
. Because many teachers
does
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not concern about
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the feeling
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feeling
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feelings
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of
pupils
and
difficulties
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the difficulties
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which
pupils
face up with in studying and changing psychology.
Moreover
, many schools know about
this
problems
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problem
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but they do have efficient
solutions
to solve it and it becomes more serious over time. In my opinion, there are some
solutions
which
i
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think can reduce
this
negative problem.
First
, parents should manage
children'
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children games
games
and make sure that
this
game may not have negative impacts.
Second
,
school
and family should have more contact when
children
have abnormal actions and have
solutions
as soon as they can.
Third
, one room for psychology may be necessary to make sure that
school's
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solutions
may
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efficiency
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and
do
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apply
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not make
situation
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the situation
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become worse.
Finally
,
pupils
should be studied lessons about good characters
such
as friendly, kind,
honest
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and honest
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. In conclusion, bullying is not easy to delete at
school
. But we must have
solutions
to reduce
problems
and make sure that the effect of bullying does not permanent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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