IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Reporting of crimes and other kinds of violent news on television and in newspapers can have adverse consequences. This kind of information should be restricted from being shown in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? You should write at least 250 words.

#crimes #kinds #news #television #newspapers #consequences #information #media
The number of crimes increasing day by day all over the world, so, reporting of these types of
news
 on television and the newspaper is
also
 higher in number than past. Some believe that overexposure to violent
news
 may have adverse effects. 
Therefore
,
this
 type of propaganda should be limited. I completely agree with
this
 statement, since channel shows
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and prints related to unpleasant incidents have damaging outcomes.   Crime and violence are very interesting areas for both the broadcast media and the newspapers due to various reasons. Primarily, sensational
news
 leads to the enhancement of viewership of the digital platform and readers of the newspaper.
Furthermore
, the majority of
people
 are
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
thrill
Replace the word
thrilled
show examples
 to know about crimes.
For example
; In Kerala, almost all Malayalam
channels
 have exclusive programmes for presenting crime and violence
news
, as well as the time of the programme is at late night. In
this
 way, the
channels
 use peak time for showing these types of
news
 to increase their watch hour and profit of the
channels
.  Knowing about all kinds of
news
 is essential for surrounding awareness.
However
, bad
news
 influence negatively not only adults but
also
 children. According to research,
people
's subconscious mind is badly affected by spending more time on these types of
news
.
Firstly
, gradually
this
 may develop a tendency towards criminal activities.
For instance
; a 10-year-old boy conducts a robbery on the inspiration of a famous case.
Moreover
, it causes bad attitudes and rough character among adults which causes a difficult, unhappy life. So, addiction to misdeeds and violent
news
  will badly engage folks.   In conclusion, the shows and the reports related to crimes are grown in the
channels
 as well as in the newspapers and the number of viewers is
also
 high. Some argue that negative
news
 has an evil effect on
people
.
This
 essay pointing that
news
channels
 and
news
 reports have a great role in conveying Information to a large audience, even If exaggeration of
news
 will change the attitude of
people
 rudely.
Submitted by saeedrila on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: