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Marketers should not be allowed to target children in their advertisements. Would you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Kids
 should not be allowed to be targeted in advertisements for
products
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product
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 marketing. In my opinion, I totally agree that using other targets in advertising can create more awareness of the product
instead
 of using
kids
. Using
children
 to be a target to promote the
products
.
This
 is the direct way to attract customers but
this
 can be used only for the product that relates to
kids
while
 other
products
 that are not related
for
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children
 are unnecessary.
Moreover
, youngsters do not have enough maturity to distinguish the information they have seen from the media in the way adults can and clearly
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the company could not get high sales
from
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 targeting
children
 who are not yet able to resist their sales pitch.
Furthermore
, some
children
 do not have the ability to purchase the
products
 and have to persuade their parents to buy the
products
 for them.
Therefore
, the companies ought to create marketing directly to parents who have the ability to afford the
products
 or use a campaign to lead to good relationships between parents and their
kids
 to convince them to buy their goods.
To sum up
, product marketing that targets
children
 should not be allowed which I agree with and think that the companies ought to advertise directly to adults, who have
kids
, the ability to purchase the goods and be able to distinguish advertising from actual programming,
instead
 of
children
.
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