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Discipline is an ever-increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#discipline #schools #people #responsibility #teachers #role #parents
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emphasize
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beneficial
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kids have any information about some subjects before they attend
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high school because if they have any knowledge, they learn easier some subjects.
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, many parents prefer to their
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kindergarten
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children
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 when they are young.
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 when they get organised, they take it seriously and try to get deeper and better.
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, they have more responsibilities at
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 are bright, so you should not torture them. The knowledge they received when they were teenagers will never be forgotten. In conclusion, it can be said that if
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 are organized from a young age, their worldview will be expanded and their future
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 will be better.
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