the number of visitors to three london museums between 2007 and 2012

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The diagram illustrates the number of people visiting three London museums from 2007 to 2012. These museums are
national
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the national
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Gallery,
he
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the
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Victoria and Albert
Museum
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, and the British
Museum
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. Overall, all three
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museum
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museums
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has fluctuated trend during the given time period. In 2007, the
national
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Gallery has the least visitor with only around 6
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millions
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million
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people yet it grows ever since to
be
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just over 15
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million
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millions
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million
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by 2012. Meanwhile, the British
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museum
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Museum
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started the number with 12
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millions
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million
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visitors yet it
was
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decreased by half in the following year. It
then
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went plateaued in 2009 and
increasing
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for the rest of the period and ended up being the
second
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highest visitor,
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for just under 15
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millions
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million
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visitors. When the two museums successfully grew the number of visitors, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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lose
it's
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visitor
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visitors
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by the end of the period.
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