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Philippine has the highest population. Do you agree of disagree?

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The
two
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 pie charts compare the percentages of British students at one university in England who were able to speak different
languages
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in addition
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 to English (no other
language
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, French only, German only, Spanish only, another
language
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, and
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 other
languages
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) in the years 2000 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that while speaking Spanish, another
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 and
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 other
languages
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 increased in 2010, the percentage of speaking French, no other
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 and German only have the least proportion. In 2000, learners spoke 30% of the Spanish
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 and
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 rose to 35% in 2010. The proportion of articulating another
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 inclined from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010. An opposite decline was seen in speaking no other
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 from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.
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, the percentage of total British students speaking
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 other
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 declined gradually, from 10% to 20% in 2000 and 2010, respectively.
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, German only remained relatively stable at 10% in both years. Unlike the French
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 which slightly declined from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.
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