The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the last few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages widespread use of cell phones? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your personal experience.

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In the
last
decade, there has been an upward trend in the manner in which mobile phones are used
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entrepreneurs, friends and family. Even recently, cell phones have more sophisticated functions that enable the user
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out a wide range of activities. These functions cause many users to utilise their phones for good and bad purposes.
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essay highlights these purposes. One of the pros of using the cell
phone
is that it can encourage the growth of small businesses when upcoming entrepreneurs advertise their business  or products on their
phone
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if they do not have enough money to rent a shop. They can do
this
for instance
via Facebook, Instagram or WhatsApp statuses where they have the advantage of getting a large audience.
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communication has become better
as a result
of mobile
phone
usage,
for
instance
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family and friends relate a lot better through video calls, texts and voice calls. Unlike before when we had to wait for days until
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letter gets to the desired destination.
On the other hand
, there are bad sides to the use of these devices.
For
instance
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there has been an increase in
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in the
last
five years, even
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though there
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have been records of teenagers that are bullied to commit suicide.
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, fraudulent activities like money laundering,
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and stealing
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of funds from bank account holders occur through the use of mobile devices. In summary, while the advent of the mobile
phone
has many advantages some of which have been discussed, it
also
comes with some disadvantages. Individuals are encouraged to desist from
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using these devices in ways that will cause harm to man.
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